I will deconstruct your manuscript and look at the many parts that create the whole. I will show you and offer advice on how to correct problems. Full analysis of the manuscript will take the following into account:
- Point of View (POV)
- Character development
Do all your characters “sound” the same? Does the illiterate beggar use the vocabulary of a rocket scientist? Unless there is a plausible character trait that allows this, a beggar will have a different voice and word choice than a rocket scientist.
- Word choice
All stories have conflict/tension/suspense on some level.